Is this a good story line?

yeah thats sounds great. but you didnt say what the plot, or the moral is. do you have one? i would like to know what it is, and it definetly sounds like something i woulf read. could i possibly have a copy when youre done? i too am writing a manga and mine sounds half-rate compared to how you described yours. i wrote it down on one of my questions. perhaps you could help me? i would be really greatful (^-^)